Reflection:

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Flow of narrative/does it make sense?

To me, this drabble makes a lot of sense and it flows really well which surprised me. The first drabble I wrote with this prompt was slightly difficult to do since I wasn’t certain how exactly to structure it. However, it became clearer to me as I worked on this drabble and, I think, it definitely flows better than the second week’s drabble of the same prompt.

Visual/emotional impact:

I believe this carries a lot of emotional weight behind it and uses visual imagery to carry forward that emotional weight. It starts with the conflicting emotions of her being sad and the weather being sunny, the middle compromises of her becoming angry and the weather doesn’t quite match up and is instead just overcast of some sort. The last matches up with her emotion: she’s finally crying and feeling and so the weather feels with her, is grieving with her. It’s a release of emotions she allowed herself to have and I think this, in particular, has a very profound interpretation on how emotions work.

Was the original intent conveyed/changed in any way?

Not really. I had an idea in my mind and I went forward with it. It stayed consistent as I wrote it and it was incredibly easy for me to find the words to convey the meaning that I wanted to convey in the first place.

What was different about the second draft process compared to the first?

I think this was easier to write because I already had an idea in my head as I wrote it and I wrote it in accordance to that idea. In comparison to week two’s drabble, this one focused on a single character and how they changed over time. I think it’s generally harder to convey a change of relationship over time because there’s two people and it must convey a set of intricate steps that actually indicate a change in relationship. As a result, I struggled to fit the word count in the second week’s drabble and I also found it lacking in emotional impact. However, this one I found was incredibly easy to fit into the word count. It was a simple concept but it was still conveyed smoothly. I think I tried to convey too much in the second week’s drabble which is why I struggled and so this is far better by comparison.

Was it easy or difficult to implement changes based on the first draft’s criteria?

I don’t think I outlined many changes to implement in my second draft. Instead, I changed the concept. Instead of focusing on a relationship, I focused on a singular person and how they went through a process which I think is far easier to do than trying to encompass the entirety of something complex. Not that a person’s grief is complex but it’s something that can be conveyed in these one hundred words while two people require a connection and several instances for it to develop satisfactorily. Within a drabble form, it’s hard to envelope a relationship since there must be surrounding context to properly understand it.

Am I satisfied with the second draft?

As difficult as I make it sound, a relationship developing in one hundred words isn’t completely impossible. I think for my own standards, its harder to put in everything I want to put in while with a single person I can focus on them and only on them and how they’re changing. Overall, I’m actually really satisfied with this one. I think preferentially, if there isn’t any context that can go with my one hundred words, I’d go with one person and how they process an emotion. I could try to simplify a relationship concept like I did with second week’s drabble but I personally don’t like it.