Reflection:

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Flow of narrative/does it make sense?

 

I believe the narrative in this is very clear. It’s just one person teasing another, talking about a past event, and I don’t think there’s much context needed with this given there’s some embedded in between the lines in this drabble. I think it can be self-contained and read without any background information which made it fun to write overall.

 

Visual/emotional impact:

 

There’s not much impact aside from the obvious banter and light-heartedness. However, it’s possible it may invoke some humour given what exactly is discussed in the drabble. There’s some instances of physical action but no emotional save for the aforementioned humour. However, I think that’s what makes it a good drabble because it’s balanced enough and gives enough to invoke a light atmosphere.

 

Was the original intent conveyed/changed in any way?

 

When I wrote it, I just went on a bit of a tangent and let the characters take the wheel. I adhered to their personalities and, once I had an idea, I flowed with it. While there’s no clear intent I wanted to convey in the first place, I still think this drabble was done rather well nonetheless. It made sense and it flowed naturally as dialogue does and the characters I had in mind especially helped with making it so smooth.

 

What was different about the second draft process compared to the first?

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With the first draft, I had some idea of where the drabble was going. I had the idea in my head and so it was somewhat planned out. However, both processes were somewhat the same: I let the natural dialogue flow and, afterwards, I went back and actually typed in what the physical gestures were, mostly because I was more focused on the speech rather than what the characters were doing.

 

Was it easy or difficult to implement changes based on the first draft’s criteria?

 

The main goal for this drabble was to have 50/50 dialogue and action. I somewhat managed that though I believe I leaned more towards the dialogue part rather than the action. It took me a bit to think of what gestures would even go with the dialogue mostly because I tend to leave body language up to the reader’s imagination. If it’s important, I’ll implement an action, especially when the idea in the dialogue isn’t as effectively conveyed as it is with action.

 

Am I satisfied with the second draft?

 

I’m pretty satisfied with this. It’s been a learning experience, especially when I think dialogue tends to speak for itself sometimes. While action does help in some instances, dialogue can easily standalone which is what I learned while writing this drabble. I believe with further writing, when I go back to add physical aspects to any piece of dialogue I write, I won’t try to add to it just to balance both dialogue and description out. Instead, I’ll let the dialogue speak for itself and see how it goes. When doing the editing process, I’ll see how it reads aloud and if it doesn’t quite match what my intentions were, only then will I add some physical description to it. I think physical description may something interrupt the flow of reading and makes the reader pause unnecessarily, especially when real life dialogue isn’t quite like that.