Reflection:

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Flow of narrative/does it make sense?

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This drabble makes sense since it capitalizes on a single moment/action and, ultimately, the end realization. A girl’s basically kissing another girl, the first physical act, and there’s a quiet appreciation of how it feels before going onto describing briefly the rest of the physical aspect. While not directly mentioned, there’s an implication of her limbs flailing and general awkwardness of where to place them. It comes full circle with a repetition of the first sentence, starting with how ‘pleasant’ it is to how she’s realized it’s ‘home’.

 

Visual/emotional impact:

 

There’s a casual mix of visual and emotional impact in this piece; while prevalent in the second paragraph there’s hints of it throughout all of it. For example, ‘she kisses her, and thinks how pleasant it is’. It’s a visual of kissing her, a heavily suggestive word in the first place, followed by the emotional reaction of finding it pleasant.

 

Was the original intent conveyed/changed in any way?

 

I just wanted to write about a girl being awkward in having her first kiss with another kiss. A piece of ‘self-discovery’ in a way that adheres to a lot of innocent stereotypes of naivety and innocent curiosity about this. It’s an experience that I wanted to expand on and let the readers decide whatever they feel towards it; whether it’s relatable due to it being something she’s done for the first time or just reading about a girl experiencing something new and finding it ‘home’.

 

What was easy?

 

As mentioned in the first week’s reflection, I prefer big paragraphs where I can go off in a tangent. I wanted to explore what could be familiar first and tying certain emotions to that before ultimately concluding that all those familiar things were something like ‘home’ to her. I also found it easy to focus on the emotional aspect of this because of how human and natural it would be to do something novel to oneself.

 

What was hard?

 

In contrast to the above paragraph, I found it difficult to focus on the physical aspect. I tend to concentrate mainly on the emotional aspects rather than the physical. Also, I think the single sentences were hard to craft because I wanted to encapsulate the moment and bring meaning in just that sentence. It wanted something impactful that would reflect upon the drabble as a whole and the process in finding that particular sentence to fit was something of a challenge to me. This made it particularly hard to meet the word count as well because it took a while to think of something that could both take that into account and still keep the same meaning.

 

What did I find interesting?

 

I found it interesting and fun actually to just write out an idea in a single stream of thought like with the second paragraph. In a way, it’s looking deep into the matter before it’s summarized into the end two paragraphs, and introduced with the first paragraph, which makes overall for a nice little drabble.

 

What changes do I want to make on the second draft based on the criteria set for myself?

 

While it possesses a good balance between physical and emotional aspects, I believe this drabble is still being lead firmly by the emotional feel of things. The prompt I set for myself was ‘a particular action and the feelings behind it’. It’s emotion-driven, as all actions are, but I want to see if I can write something that’s action-driven more since the first week’s prompt is something purely emotion.